2012年4月4日 星期三

Resume改寫前改寫後例子 - JobsDB Resume Sample

坊間的resume sample網站良莠不齊,間接誤導了很多求職者。許多時這些範例寫得不好,工作經驗的描述空洞,格式又簡陋,和今時今日公司的要求已經嚴重脫節。想有interview?你不能不抽時間去了解甚麼才是好的履歷

有競爭才有進步。今天我們就比較一下坊間『JobsDB』網站的resume sample,和我們的重寫resume sample,讓你自己進行比較和評分。

以下是來自『JobsDB』網站的resume sample(改寫前):
來源:http://hk.jobsdb.com/HK/EN/V6HTML/JobSeeker/Resources/jobhunting/resume/Sample5.htm

為方便比較,錯誤的部分會用紅色表示。



Mary Wong ( 王小雯 )
Address: 2 /F Team Building, 3 Smooth Road, Hong Kong
Phone (Office): 23456789 (mobile): 98765432錯誤一
Email Address: xxx@xxx.com.hk
Career Objective
To develop career in Public Relations Industry錯誤二
Education
2001 – 2004 Hong Kong Baptist University, Bachelor of Social Sciences in Communication (specialisation in Public Relations and Advertising)
Working Experience
October 2004 to Present Public Relations Officer, XYZ Public Relations Co Ltd.
  • Plan, organise and manage PR events, campaigns and activities
  • Write/translate press releases and other promotional materials
  • Develop relationship with the press
May to September 2003 Public Relations Assistant (Internship), ABA International Co Ltd.
  • Liaise with production house and advertising agencies on TVC production錯誤三
  • Liaise with vendors to provide technical support to clients
Extra-curricular Activities
2002 Chairman of Society of Communication, Hong Kong Baptist University弱點
Professional Qualifications
2004 Member of Professional Marketing Association, Hong Kong
Skills
MS Word, Excel, PowerPoint
Languages
English (spoken and written), Cantonese, Putonghua弱點
Reference
Available upon request
Availability
One month’s notice




這份『JobsDB』網站resume sample犯了好幾個錯,現在只談些比較明顯的:

錯誤一:胡亂提供無用資料,格式錯誤。無人會欣賞在一份全英文的resume 裡出現一個莫名其妙的中文名。另外,如果你想營造一種國際化的印象,單獨用『Mary Wong』這個名字不夠優雅,聽起來像是三四流的低學歷求職者。如果你申請的不是蚊型本地公司而是國際大公司,你應該像外國人一樣加個middle name或initials。『Mary R. Wong』『Mary Rebecca Wong』聽起來會比較有國際視野。中文名和地址在這階段可以完全不寫。

求職的聯絡方法絕對不要寫公司的電話,讓現在的公司知道你想走只會打草驚蛇,對於作為申請人的你是非常不利的。同時,『Office』和『mobile』兩個字的大小寫不一,小心的顧主看到這裡已經覺得你做事非常大意,不夠謹慎。

錯誤二: Career Objective非常空洞。 『To develop career in Public Relations Industry』真是一句廢話。你現在是申請公關公司的工作,你的意向如果不是在這一行發展,難道是想做太空人探索火星?另外,根本無人會關心你所謂的 Career Objective——顧主最關心的是你能幫他解決甚麼問題。建議你可以省略這部分,改由介紹你能力的專業簡介(Professional Summary)代替
 
錯誤三:用錯present tense,內容欠缺可觀性。過去的工作經歷應該用過去式。

除了三個明顯的錯誤,這份resume sample也充滿了令顧主懷疑你能力的弱點。

弱點一:未盡力介紹過去經驗,自我矮化。對於有興趣加入公關行業的申請人,過去在大學有相關的領袖經驗『Chairman of Society of Communication』,其實是個大賣點。而且,會長也算是靈魂人物,同屆畢業生之間也不會有太多人擁有這個涵頭。作為『女皇』的角色,理應多加闡 釋,以顯示自己跟其他無名無姓無地位的新畢業生不同。現在居然連一句介紹也沒有,from queen bee to wannabe,完全是undersold了自己的經驗。

弱點二:語文能力程度不明香港很少人是完全不 懂英文的。絕大部分香港人都會懂一點點基本的英文。所以在語文能力一欄你寫『English (spoken and written), Cantonese, Putonghua』是絕對不夠的。你應該要注明你的程度,例如是『native』,『fluent』,『elementary』。




我們的重寫resume sample (改寫後):

Mary R. Wong 
Home: 2345 6789  Mobile: 9876 5432
Email Address: marywong@hongkongresumes.com


Professional Summary
Enthusiastic and pleasant public relations professional with comprehensive experiences in event marketing, press release writing and campaign management.  Proven ability to gain media coverage and attract attention. Exceptional communication skills with fluency in English, Mandarin and Cantonese. 
 
Education
Hong Kong Baptist University, 201x – 201x 
Bachelor of Social Sciences in Communication - specialisation in Public Relations and Advertising

Selected Professional Experience
 
October 201x to Present     Public Relations Officer, XYZ Public Relations Co Ltd. 
 
  • Plan, organize and manage PR events, campaigns and activities for clients of all sizes - from startups to Fortune 500 companies.
  • Create press releases for events and products of various industries, including FMCG, Automobile, Telecom and Healthcare.
  • Ensure clients receive maximum coverage by continuously building new and maintaining existing relationships with leading local  media, including Oriental Daily, Apple Daily, The Sun, HKEJ, NOW and TVB.
  • Measure, evaluate and create reports on campaign effectiveness. Analyze industry trends and make campaign recommendations.
 
May to September 201x     Public Relations Assistant (Internship), ABA International Co Ltd.
 

  • Ensured success of TVC production by liaising with key members of production houses and agencies before, during and after the shoot. Monitored the process to ensure the project is delivered on time and within budget.
  • Provided timely technical support to clients by collaborating with third party specialist vendors.





Leadership Experience 
 
September 201x to September 201x     Chairman of Society of Communication, Hong Kong Baptist University 
 
  •  Won the student election to lead the 200-member Communication Society as Chairperson. Successfully organized 12 learning and networking events. 
  • Built and updated the society website and social networking profiles.

Professional Qualifications
201x Member of Professional Marketing Association, Hong Kong
 
Skills
MS Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Adobe Illustrator, InDesign
 
Languages
English: Fluent
Mandarin: Fluent
Cantonese: Native
Availability
One month’s notice